Concise Sentences: Quiz 2

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: Earlier this month, a terrible tragedy occurred. A US destroyer collided with a cargo ship, a collision that resulted in the deaths of seven US sailors.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: Over the last while, there has been an increase in the number of robberies perpetrated by clowns.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: First and foremost, we have had some preliminary discussions concerning the issue of whether we should build a ring road.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: The native habitat of the kakapo is rather threatened by extensive logging operations.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: If my grandmother had not written an autobiography of her life, we would not have been able to understand her dislike of Sicilians.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: Should it happen that we do get more foreign immigrants, we will provide more financial resources for ESL classes.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: New innovations in cancer research have the potential to provide a cure for prostate cancer.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: An armed gunman held us hostage and forced us to kneel down and pledge our allegiance and devotion to Rastafarianism.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: The actual ownership of the soccer pitch has reverted back to the Zanzibar football club, which effectively means that the local zoo can no longer use the pitch for its rhinoceros races.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: Due to the fact that we are pressed for time, I will not prevaricate, expatiate, or digress, but will limit myself to a brief summary of my core beliefs and principles.