Concise Sentences: Quiz 1

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: Close scrutiny of the Panama Papers reveals that you essentially hid much of your income in off-shore tax havens.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: It is so very surprising that we have fossils of jellyfish, as Charles Darwin actually predicted that soft-bodied animals would be very unlikely to enter the fossil record.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: Virginia Woolf stated that in her opinion some female novelists wrote with way too much bitterness, anger, disgruntlement, and resentment.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: My study of tree rings in the Calgary area clearly shows that droughts were more common in the past than we may have been accustomed to think.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: Angkor Wat was originally built by a Hindu king, but when the Khmer rulers of Cambodia later became Buddhists they turned it into a Buddhist temple.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: According to my conception of the plan, I think that if we first open up a branch in Manhattan then we can later expand to Berlin.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: Apparently, the male royal albatross is often first to arrive at the nesting site. When the male royal albatross arrives it will start to build the nest. However, when the female arrives it may sometimes decide that the site is inappropriate and start to build a new nest.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: Andrea just wanted to upload and file her taxes electronically. However, as is so often the case, the government website was down again.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: Ben thought of starting a website where children could leave reviews of their parents. However, he worried that such a website where kids could comment on their caregivers might get a lot of parents in trouble with social services.

Instructions: Please rewrite the following sentence to make it more concise. Keep the same ideas and content, but get rid of redundant words and phrasing. After you submit your sentence, read the feedback to see our suggestion(s). There isn’t always one perfect answer. In some ways it’s the process of editing that’s most important.

Sentence: As I have mentioned any number of times now, the practice of betting on sports not only makes many of the results somewhat suspect, but also changes fundamentally what sport should be about.